I thought this was an adorable little first game. I got all three endings, starting with the third, then the first, then had to twiddle around a bit to find ending 2, which is a LOT like ending 1.
There is some decent writing in this! (Ostensibly, allegedly, if you're feeling generous AND you squint, I write games ""professionally"", and have done for well over a decade now.)
I noticed the humor. It might be a good idea rewriting it again but completely dead straight serious, as an exercise. Either that and/or coming up with a "good" ending.
But my final comment is this: a tennis jam vaporizing a Labrador-sized cockroach into green goo? Dubious. Have you ever squashed a real cockroach or really any substantial bug? I'm not saying you can't kill one in one half-decent hit with a shoe or a rolled up magazine or whatever, but they definitely leave a surprisingly intact corpse behind. They are unpleasantly crunchy.
Awesome! Thanks for the feedback and the suggestions. I totally get what you mean about crunchy corpses. I took some liberties in order to achieve as much of a goose-bumpsian atmosphere as possible without worrying about twitching carapaces and (possibly) little roach babies crawling out of a popped egg casing.
I really enjoyed this! Great job on your first game. The writing was funny and I had a fun time getting all 3 endings! Your game starts at 5:05ish if you want to see my reaction. Keep it up!!
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hey! just letting you know we're hosting another HORRORJAM this year if you're interested in giving it another go :)
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I thought this was an adorable little first game. I got all three endings, starting with the third, then the first, then had to twiddle around a bit to find ending 2, which is a LOT like ending 1.
There is some decent writing in this! (Ostensibly, allegedly, if you're feeling generous AND you squint, I write games ""professionally"", and have done for well over a decade now.)
I noticed the humor. It might be a good idea rewriting it again but completely dead straight serious, as an exercise. Either that and/or coming up with a "good" ending.
But my final comment is this: a tennis jam vaporizing a Labrador-sized cockroach into green goo? Dubious. Have you ever squashed a real cockroach or really any substantial bug? I'm not saying you can't kill one in one half-decent hit with a shoe or a rolled up magazine or whatever, but they definitely leave a surprisingly intact corpse behind. They are unpleasantly crunchy.
Awesome! Thanks for the feedback and the suggestions. I totally get what you mean about crunchy corpses. I took some liberties in order to achieve as much of a goose-bumpsian atmosphere as possible without worrying about twitching carapaces and (possibly) little roach babies crawling out of a popped egg casing.
Nice. And terrifying!
Thank you!
I really enjoyed this! Great job on your first game. The writing was funny and I had a fun time getting all 3 endings! Your game starts at 5:05ish if you want to see my reaction. Keep it up!!
Hell yeah! Thanks a ton for taking the time to play it and the kind words. Definitely will leave a like and subscribe!
I cant win, this cockroach is too scary. Ending 1/3 and 2/3
Nice! Thank you for playing!